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Assignment 3: tutor feedback

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I’ve had my tutor’s report on Assignment 3 for about a week and while I’ve absorbed it and decided what to do with the feedback, I’ve only just found time to write this up.

As ever it’s a very thorough report, taking time to comment not only on the assignment but my wider learning log including the exercises in this section. It’s generally positive and encouraging, with a few pointers on where to improve and what to rework before final submission time.

The ‘Overall Comments’ section is reproduced below, after which I will summarise the comments per picture and my response to them.

“An energetic submission and you have practiced and considered the images taken. You are thoughtful and questioning in your journal entries, and you are honest in your initial reflection.

Exploring the assignment with the concept of illustrating stages in your own life is interesting. This gives a sense of the story unfolding and the places you chose begin to reflect this well. Some of the images could have been more sensitive to the ideas and I understand the challenge of this as the idea came after the images were taken.

The prints are clean and sharp.”

The comment on some images suiting the ‘life stages’ idea better than others is bang on – I admitted that the over-arching construct only occurred to me after I’d taken most of the photos and was struggling a little with how they could hang together as a cohesive whole (something that I am particularly interested in when it comes to assignments, for better or worse – I think it’s important that the images work not just individually but as a series that adds up to more than the sum of the parts).

On a practical note, I’m glad the prints came out well as I’ve had comments from both my tutors on my prints before now. I think I’ve finally got the hang of colour calibration to make sure what I see on my monitor matches what ends up on the photo paper. I invested in a decent display calibration tool and that seems to have made the difference.

Comments per set:

1. Promenade du Paillon Fountains – ‘Play’

  • “Your personal caption is fun and the images illustrate the idea. I do wonder if you have made the weakest image the largest? The leaping boy is really energetic and I think with some more careful and sensitive cropping this could be better as it looks a little unbalanced. Consider also the other images seem to be taken from a greater height. Is this you looking back as an adult height or do you hunker down to child eye view? With the strong reflections there are some potentially exciting images here, you have taken simple landscapes of the area. Think about what the children see when they are in this place? They will probably have no notion of the wide vistas as their view would be the water and the most immediate surroundings.”
  • Fair point on the layout – I took a standard approach throughout to make the first and largest image the widest view of the whole space, but with hindsight Sam is right, I should select the best image
  • The crop of the leaping boy image – for most of my prep this was a tighter portrait crop but at the last minute I bottled it as the other 17 images were landscape ratio and I went for full consistency; I will rework this back to the original crop idea and see if the layout works better
  • The comments about the child’s-eye point of view are interesting, and yes maybe I should have taken this more into consideration when shooting; at the time I was shooting as I normally do, full-height, camera to my eye… now I see it could have been more interesting to shoot from low down, from a child’s point of view – luckily I am back in Nice this week and could do some reshoots

2. Giessereihalle – ‘Friends’

  • “Again your caption is very reminiscent, and actually rather sad. This brings the images together and makes them make sense. The big industrial hall is interesting, the point of this time is that it actually didn’t matter what the space was, it was the social group that made it. So the magnificent and striking surrounds become insignificant to the social event. Just look at groups of young people today, some stand around in the most uninspiring places but that doesn’t matter. The space photographed here has lots of potential for bold geometric compositions. (Look at the work by Candida Hofer).”
  • In terms of the ‘life stages’ theme, this was a little more of a stretch than some of the others… if I hadn’t chosen the narrative format, I’d have featured more of the building itself, as the roof structure in particular was magnificent in its industrial design… but once I’d committed to the life stages construct I had to select images that fit the narrative of young people meeting up
  • My favourite of this set is definitely the first one, and that’s the one that most makes sense in the context of Sam’s recommendation of Candida Hofer – I see the genre similarities

3. King’s Cross – ‘Commuting’

  • “The caption is the key again to this set. You have hinted at some very profound ideas here. The image of the man alone in the crowd is the most obvious portrayal of this and I think could be the main image. Also think about the people in that space, all that rushing around and the space having a function but also being nowhere. I wonder if a long exposure with the movement a blur could have been a development?”
  • Again I concur on the choice of main image and will rework the layout
  • I have taken long exposures of the same space since the assignment and may insert one into the set to replace one of the first two images

4. Negresco Royal Lounge – ‘Culture’

  • “This is rather a beautiful space but could also been seen as a simple interpretation of the idea. I think it is very valid to consider that a time comes when you start to think about the rushing around and striving and what it means, it also has to do with mortality issues which leads us further into ideas about memory and celebration of understanding creative legacies. I like the detail image here. The main image is pleasing and has an interesting composition. The other interior architectural image looks rather cramped and either needs to be closer in or further out or more visually challenging.”
  • I agree on the second image looking cramped, and as per the leaping boy image from set 1, I had tried a portrait crop before settling on this framing – I will rework along the lines of Sam’s recommendation

5. Coach Restoration Workshop – ‘Labour of Love’

  • “This set of images works best in an image sense but is a little less successful with your caption. Maybe this is because you are imaging the future? This is a good selection of images what explores the space, the image you chose to print is interesting and the man framed in the curve of (whatever it is) works well. The intense concentration is really evident here.”
  • Yes, I see what she means about the caption, it does come across as a little tenuous and disconnected compared to the others; I think the concept makes sense (to me anyway!) and maybe I need to come up with a better caption to link my idea and the images better

6. Quaker Garden – ‘Tranquility’

  • “A nice idea or dream! I wonder if this could have been an occasion to interpret the images of you actually now stopping and looking at the world more because all the other ‘stages’ have been about very immediate or almost internal explorations. You suggest this is a time to sit and really look at the world and reflect on what has been? This would change your compositions and maybe also your angle of view, think of the space. (You have actually explored some of these ideas in your text, that knowledge needs to be used for your visual exploration too)”
  • I must confess, I’m still digesting the comments on this… I think I know what Sam’s suggesting but I’m not wholly sure how to rework or reshoot to get the message across… I’m still thinking about it – I reckon the key to it might be to actually sit up there for an hour in quiet contemplation (but unfortunately I’m out of the country for a week…)

Recommendations

Sam has suggested I take a look at the work of some photographers that might inform my thinking on this kind of work:

“Look at the work by Andreas Gursky for your next assignment, this work gives another scale and measured observation, which is fascinating to see.

Duane Michals, Arnold Newman, Matta Clarke, Hannah Starkey also have challenging images on people and place.

Annette Kuhn and Rosy Martin write about memory and the family album.

Read theory text by Liz Wells to explore some of the ideas you presented, ie memory/ space/ function/ buildings.”

I’m familiar with some but not all of these, so will take time this week to research them all. I confess that I started reading Wells but found it quite hard-going so put it to one side!. Maybe it’s time to try it again.

In all, I’m pleased with the feedback – it points me in directions of thinking and working that can improve my photography. I’m definitely starting to think about the possibilities of photography as a visual language – for storytelling, for communication generally – over and above the purely aesthetic. It’s exciting and scary in equal part…

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